Sunday, February 24, 2013
theme week 3
Standing behind the check out counter at work I watch customers rushing in and out of the store. Mothers trying to calm crying babies. Children in too big winter coats demanding video games, movies, and candy. Young couples shopping for new appliances for their just bought homes. Employees in blue shirts wheel big screen TVs up from out back and take them outside into the snow with no jackets, to load them in to the customers cars. The customers drive home with their new items and the employees come back into the store, happy to get out of the cold.
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Well, there's the scene and nicely done too, but week three looks for the scene and dialogue too, so this is not finished yet. Try a rewrite with some speakers or an internal monologue.
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